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The weather was really nice today,so my roomate Shily and I took the excursion to the farm.When we arrived at the farm,I was surprised to find so many bright red apples on the tree and their slight sweet smell drifted in the air.I still could feel that attracted apple fragrance until now.A group of bees left their hive which was hanging on the tree go to work.However,the lazy bat still hang on the tree slept quality.In the same time,the little blue bird on the top of the tree was watching that the cow and the horse was eating grasses in the fence.Because the little blue bird was worried about that some enemies will come to hurt its friends the cow and the horse or not.During the noon,while the turtle was sunbathing on the wood in the river,the fluffy bunny was hiding the ultraviolet rays under the apple tree.Also,the new born baby bird was try to fly because it's really hungry that it want to go the other place find something eat.When we began to leave,my lovely dog asked me that the rooster has a cockscomb on the top of the head why it doesn't have.In sum,I has a great time on lovely farm today.It not only eased our stress but also enjoyed country life a lot.I think I will come here often because the peaceful farm can make me forget city's busy and crowded.
請幫忙改改文法還有修飾整篇文章,謝謝!
這篇文章我是看圖敘述的
謝謝幫忙!!!!
The weather was really nice today,so my roomate Shily and I took the excursion to the farm.When we arrived at the farm,I was surprised to find so many bright red apples on the tree and their slight sweet smell drifted in the air.I still could feel that attracted apple fragrance until now.A group of bees left their hive which was hanging on the tree go to work.However,the lazy bat still hang on the tree slept quality.In the same time,the little blue bird on the top of the tree was watching that the cow and the horse was eating grasses in the fence.Because the little blue bird was worried about that some enemies will come to hurt its friends the cow and the horse or not.During the noon,while the turtle was sunbathing on the wood in the river,the fluffy bunny was hiding the ultraviolet rays under the apple tree.Also,the new born baby bird was try to fly because it's really hungry that it want to go the other place find something eat.When we began to leave,my lovely dog asked me that the rooster has a cockscomb on the top of the head why it doesn't have.In sum,I has a great time on lovely farm today.It not only eased our stress but also enjoyed country life a lot.I think I will come here often because the peaceful farm can make me forget city's busy and crowded.
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The weather was really nice,so my roomate Shily and I took the excursion to the farm.When we arrived at the farm,I was surprised that I found so many bright red apples on the tree and their slight sweet smell drifted in the air.I still could feel that attracted apple fragrance until now.A group of bees left their hive which was hanging on the tree to go to work.However,the lazy bat still hang on the tree slept quality.In the same time,the little blue bird on the top of the tree was watching the cow and the horse eating grasses in the fence.Because the little blue bird was worried about wether some enemies will come to hurt its friends the cow and the horse or not.During the noon,while the turtle was sunbathing on the wood in the river,the fluffy bunny was hiding the ultraviolet rays under the apple tree.Also,the new born baby bird was trying to fly because it was really hungry that it wanted to go the other place to find something which could be eaten.When we began to leave,my lovely dog asked me that the rooster had a cockscomb on the top of the head why it didn't have.In sum,I have a great time on lovely farm today.It not only eases our stress but also enjoys country life a lot.I think I will come here often because the peaceful farm can make me forget city's business and crowded.
2009-11-08 12:27:15 補充：
亂碼重新貼
it didn't have→it didn't have
city's business →city's business
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